The virtue of weakness

1. 우리가 우리의 약점을 깨닫는 순간

 have you ever undergone a great deal of frustration caused by your best friend who are good at English and Mathmatics... and have good looking , and have well- proportionate body, have money in house ? In another way, i will question. If you are a basketball player , but you have so short height that you can not make a great dunk shot. In this situation, how do we react in such cases? Of course, you start to compare you with your friends and condemn you with the fact that you lack  the ability that your friends have but you do not. As time goes by, we rationalize our weakness and easily preclude that i am not as smart as him or she, and it is natural for him to surpass me.
However, why should we be frustrated with our weakness and call people who are smaller and have less experiences as loser and underdog?  A great example shows that things that have more limitations and weakness dominate stronger ones.

2. 인류가 자연을 극복한 예


Human beings Is it a little paradoxical? Weakness / directly connected to dominion on nature.

Human beings have been good at changing their weakness to strong points and overcoming their limitations in natural state.  In effect, it is well known that human beings are not as survivable as other ecosystem and other creatures. Human beings have not  fur as much as 영장류-> so it is hard to live in cold state, and human beings have shorter ability to foresee coming disaster or to search other food by using 초음파... 또... Human being is not as strong as lion or horse
However, it is bound to say that finding out our human beings weakness made possible for human to dominate and 생육하고 번성하게 하다. As we talk about , because human beings have not as much fur as animals, to live in cold state , human being created  a clothes and put them on and even human beings have been spread to regions where people are not easy to . Also, as human beings have less ability than other animals that have very developed sensitive sense, to overcome it , human beings have studied and made intense technological advances. And nowadays even the society is connected and the boarders between nations are being collapsed and the internationalization prevails. It is the result that human beings made their weak points as 현대사회는 국제화의 흐름까지 만들어졌음. 동물이나 식물의 세계에서도 un이 만들어지고 지구촌사회가 만들어지고, 어떤 국제교류가 이루어지고 있는 가? 전혀 그렇지 않다. 그러면서 인간은 가장 고등한 생물로서 존재.


3. 약점에 직면했을 때 우리가 취할 수 있는 선택 3

Then, let's assume that you found your weakness that you want to hide toward other people. In this situation, what are you supposed to? what is the best reactions ? There would be 3 choices or for someone there might be more choices.

First, you avoid  your weakness. or you can ignore your weakness completely. Although you already found your weakness, there is no effort to overcome your inability, rather you avoid and shirk thinking itself. people can live with mind that i have no weakness,  Maybe it would be the easiest way for us because  there is no room for addressing and thinking for long time. Therefore, it is not a desirable approaching way.  and let's see the next alternative.

Second, you accept your weakness and acknowledge your weakness and accept it natural thing. And you rationalize that everyone have weakness to some extent. And you think that it is a characteristic that make you as you. This approaching way really makes you feel relived and free from the plight. This approaching way is desirable resolutions that is suggested by mentalist to help people who are suffering from frustration of them. This approaching way is praised  as treatment for modern people.  However, there is limitations that are enough to correct our weakness and develop us. Let's step one step more.

Third, the most desirable way to react to weakness is to  address your own new way, not a traditional way to counter stronger counterpart. And through it, you can be cracked and extremely  depressed. However, through the process, you can overcome your limitations and weakness. you'd better to experiences that show your weakness 철저하게, and encounter stronger one.


I will introduce a man who was really good at reacting when he discovered his weakness and inability and changed them into the strongest point.

1. Richard Branson had a lack of experience. Most CEO have many  experiences and people generally think that person who have former career in a specific field would be good at dealing with matters. However, Richard Branson focused on service or product rather than his own experience as CEO. When he embarked on a news business, in actually he has no experience in the field. However, he frankly told to others that he had lack of experience and 다른 신문사와 비교했을 때 경쟁력을 갖춘 어떤 청소년들을 타깃으로 하는거??
Also, Rica

1. 리처드 브랜슨은 대중 앞에서 발표하는 걸 싫어한다.
(Richard Branson hates public speaking.)

하지만 그는 대중 앞에서 발표하는 걸 지인과 같이 1대1로 대화하는 것처럼 여기기로 했다. 그의 앞에 있는 많은 관중에 집중하기 보다, 자신이 한 사람에게 말하고 있다고 상상해서, 무대공포증보다 그의 인격이 더 빛나게 했다.

3. 리처드 브랜슨은 난독증이 있다.
(Richard Branson has Dyslexia.)

하지만 그는 이러한 장애조차 자신의 비즈니스의 일부로 만들어서, 연설을 읽기보다는 귀를 기울였고, 긴 문장보다는 시각 자료를 제공했다. 그가 캠페인의 메시지를 빨리 이해했다면, 다른 사람들도 마찬가지일 거란 걸 알 수 있었다.

4. 리처드 브랜슨은 가방 끈이 짧았다.
(Richard Branson was Academically challenged.)

하지만 그는 이것을 더 대단한 걸 하기 위해 태어났다는 신호로 받아들였다. 어렸을 때부터 그의 생각이 다른 사람들과는 다르다는 걸 알았고, 이를 받아들이고 학교를 중퇴하고 자신의 비전을 따랐다. 학점이 그의 자부심이나 꿈에 영향을 미치게 하지 않았으며, 오직 자기 자신에게 매긴 학점만 땄다.

5. 리처드 브랜슨은 쉽게 질린다.
(Richard Branson gets bored easily.)

하지만 이 아이디어에서 다음 아이디어로 옮겨 타면서, 빠른 속도로 달려가는 자신의 비전을 따라갔다. 새로운 사업을 벌일 때에는 언제든 처음부터 철저히 구축하는데 몇 달을 들였고, 이후에는 그가 다른 대단한 아이디어로 옮겨갈 동안에 그 사업을 운영할 사람들을 채용했다. 이런 식으로 쉽게 질리지 않을 누군가에게 경영을 위임하면서, 그는 그 사업이 지루해질 여지를 두지 않았다.

8. 리처드 브랜슨은 컴퓨터에 약하다.
(Richard Branson is not computer-savvy.)

하지만 그는 자신을 위해 컴퓨터로 하는 모든 업무를 해 줄 사람들을 알고 있다. 그는 기술을 최대한 활용할 수 있는 능력과 지식을 가진 사람들에게 컴퓨터로 하는 업무를 위임한다.

So what i want to say  is that you'd better to go through many adversities and limitations. Although you would be extremely cracked by one stronger than you, you need to know your weaknesses  precisely. In our individual weaknesses, definitely, there is room for being stronger and f.... perhaps even, it may be more effective when you are not used to ddding and there are more possibility that you can be better off  in the state of not aware of. and  also what you should remember is that there is n  A famous writer, malcom gladwell says in his book " david and goliath."



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The virtue of weakness

제목: 약점의 아름다움

 

 

부제: 자신의 약점을 알고 만이 부딪히면서 더 나은 인간으로의 발전을 꿈꾸다

 

 

 

1. 우리가 일상속에서 겪는 경험들

 have you ever undergone a great deal of frustration caused by your best friend who are good at English and Mathmatics... and have good looking , and have well- proportionate body, have money in house ? In another way, i will question. If you are a basketball player , but you have so short height that you can not make a great dunk shot. In this situation, how do we react in such cases? Of course, you start to compare you with your friends and condemn you with the fact that you lack  the ability that your friends have but you do not. As time goes by, we rationalize our weakness and easily preclude that i am not as smart as him or she, and it is natural for him to surpass me.
However, why should we be frustrated with our weakness and call people who are smaller and have less experiences as loser and underdog?  A great example shows that things that have more limitations and weakness dominate stronger ones.

내 옆의 친구보다 아이큐가 낮다던가. 가정환경이 좋지 못하여서 어떤 고급의 교육을 받을 기회가 없다던가. 만약 그대가 농구선수라면 당신이 덩크슛을 날릴 수 있을 만큼 키가 크지 않거나. 이런 상황에서 우리들은 어떻게 하는가? 뻔하지. 비교하고 나보다 강해보이는 자들과는 최

대한 붙어보지 않으려고 할 거다. 어쩌면 그것이 나의 안위를 위해선 더 현명한 방법인지도 모르겠다. 이렇게 하는 현상 ..

우리보다 조금 더 잘나보이고 더 잘생기고 돈이 더 많은 사람을 보면 우리들은 쉽게 우리들의 약점을 인정하고 좌절. 비교해버린다. 그리고는 좌절한다.

그런데 우리는 왜 작거나 덜 숙련된 사람들을 불리하다고 단정짓는가? 이 주장이 잘못되었다는 것을 증명하는 예가 있다.

 

Human beings Is it a little paradoxical? Weakness / directly connected to dominion on nature.

Human beings have been good at changing their weakness to strong points and overcoming their limitations in natural state.  

인류는 자연세계의 발전에 있어서는 지금과는 다르게 약점이 있었기에 인류가 세계를 지배할 수 있게 되었다. 참 모순적이지 않은가? 약점이 곧 자연세계에 대한 지배. 어떤 윤리적인 문제를 떠나서 생각하는거다 알긋지?/ “생육하고 번성하게 하다” 라는 말이 여기서 적용인간은 동물들과 비교했을 때 자연상태에서 살아남기 매우 힘들었음. 인간이라는 존재는 본질적으로 다른 동물?? 생태계에 존재하는 생물들에 비해서 자연상태에 적응하기에 불리한 조건을 가지고 있다.

하지만 인간은 이런 약점을 강점으로 전화시켰다. 만약 약점이 없었으면 도태되었을 지도 모르지만.. 현대 우리가 살고있는 문명의 세계 이건 바로 누가 ?? 인간이 부족한 점이 있었기 때문이겠지..

1. 인간은 동물과 달리 털이 있는 것도 아니고 하지만 추운 날씨에서 살아남기위해서 우리 조상들은 따뜻한 옷을 만들어 입으면서 추운 날씨에 적응 해왔다. 그러면서 패션을 발전시키기도 하고.. ]

2. 문자의 사용 다른 동물들은 문자를 사용하지 않지. 오직 인간만이 갖는 특징. 문자와 언어라는 도구를 통해 우리는 홉스가말하는 만인에 대한 만인의 투쟁 상태인 자연상태에서 벗어나 하나의 계약되고 안정적인 사회를 만들어내었다. 현대사회는 국제화의 흐름까지 만들어졌음. 동물이나 식물의 세계에서도 un이 만들어지고 지구촌사회가 만들어지고, 어떤 국제교류가 이루어지고 있는 가? 전혀 그렇지 않다. 그러면서 인간은 가장 고등한 생물로서 존재.

3. 문명의 발전

인간은 역사를 쓰고..

자연재해( 지진,

개미들이나 다른 동물들은 어떤 자연재해가 곧 일어날 것이 예상되면 촉을 통해서 도망가지만 인간은 그런 능력이 없음. 과학기술을 통해서 쓰나미를 예측하고 지진을 예측함. 이

약점의 가치를 재발견 할 수 있었다면

동물에 비해서 이렇게 약점이 많은 인간은 어떻게 극복할 수 있었을까? 고도로 발달한 두뇌? 손 발? 아니다. 자연세계의 강한자들과 계속해서 부딪히고 싸우면서 극복한 것이 그 이유이다. 

Then, let's assume that you found your weakness that you want to hide toward other people. In this situation, what are you supposed to? what is the best reactions ? There would be 3 choices or for someone there might be more choices.
First, you avoid  your weakness. Although you already found your weakness, there is no effort to overcome your inability, rather you avoid and shirk thinking itself.

Second, you accept your weakness and acknowledge your weakness and accept it natural thing. And you rationalize that everyone have weakness to some extent. And you think that it is a characteristic that make you as you. This approaching way really makes you feel relived and free from the plight. This approaching way is desirable resolutions that is suggested by mentalist to help people who are suffering from frustration of them.  However, it is not enough if we stop in this step. Let's step one step more.


Third, you address your own new way, not a traditional way to counter stronger counterpart. and to overcome your limitations and weakness. You realize that it is not easy to overwhelm your counterpart with normal way. A key point is that there is no  eternal winner and eternal loser.그렇다면 우리가 남들에게는 보여주기 싫은 우리들의 약점을 찾았다고 가정해보자. 우리는 어떤 행동을 취하는 것이 가장 바람직할까? 여기에는 세가지 선택이 있을 수 있다. 또는 사람에 따라 더 많을 수 도 있겠지만..

 1. 회피해버린다. 내 약점은 나도 싫으니까 그 약점을 계속 가지고 가면서 될대로 되라 하는 거

2. 내 약점을 사랑하고 그것을 개성으로 받아들인다. 이런 마인드는 우리가 많이 힘들고 좌절을 겪을 때 자기암시? 적으로 마음을 조금 더 편하게 먹기위해 사용하는 것

3. 여기서 한 발 자국 더 나아가서 강자에 필적할 만한 나만의 필살기를 찾는 것이다. 예를 들면 강자와 약자. 영원한 강자와 약자는 없다. 예를들면

1.회피

 

2. 강자에 합리화. 내 약점을 합리화하고 인정. 내 약점을 나의 개성으로 받아들이고, 사랑하는거. 이러한 마인드는 우리가 좌절을 겪었을 때 우리들의 마인드 컨트롤을 하기위해 또는 우리들이 마음을 조금 더 편하게 먹기위해 사용하는 것이지 여기서 멈춘다면

더 나은 발전은 없다. 3. 우리들이 인간이니 만큼 한 발짝 더 나아가보자. 새로운 방법 만ㄴ들기 . 강자에 필적할 만한 나만의 필살기. 이때 다윗과 골리앗의 예를 드는 거지.. 기존의 방법과 주어진 틀에서 해결방법을 찾기엔... 너무 힘들다

또한 보편적인 것을 따르는것,... 근데 여기서 또 질문이 생긴다 보편적이고 우세하다는 것은,.. 우리들이 만든 것이므로 역으로 생각해보면 약점을 .....

 

결론:

So what i want to say  is that you'd better to go through many adversities and limitations. Although you would be extremely cracked by one stronger than you, you need to know your weaknesses  precisely. In our individual weaknesses, definitely, there is room for being stronger and f.... perhaps in some cases, it may be more effective when you are not used to ddding and there are more possibility that you can be better off  in the state of not aware of.  A famous writer, malcom gladwell says in his book " david and goliath." " 

그래서 내가 말하고 싶은 건 자신의 약점에 최대한 많이 부딪히고 모질게 당하면서 많이 부서지면서 내 약점을 알아가자는 것이다. 약점 속에 강점의 여지가 있고 어쩌면 우리가 더 연약하고 경험이 부족한 존재이기 때문에 더욱 열심히 할 여지가 있다. 거기서 그치는 것이 아니라 약점을 강점으로 만드는 필살기 그 노력이 필요하다는 것이다. 약점이 있다는 것은 채워나갈 가능성이 있다는 것. 말콤 글래드 웰은 그의 책 다윗과 골리앗에서 말합니다. 세상은 거대한 골리앗이 아니라 상처받은 다윗에 의하여 발전한다고 . 이세상의 주인공은 당신들입니다. 물론 겉보기에는 내 옆에 있는 친구들이 더 잘생겨보이고 더 멋있어보이고 더 잘나 보이기 도하지만 꼭 본질적으로 그러지는 않거든요. 항상 옳은 것도 아니고... 기억하십시오. 언더독들도 승리할 수 있다는 것을. 또 그들이 이 사회를 이끌어나갈 주체가 될 수 있다는 것을.

 

Final draft

 

English Education In Korea Does Not Work

 

There is a famous saying that "Language is a process of free creation (Chomsky,1970)". It means that through learning and using languages human beings have been able to expand the scope of their thinking and to make many creative developments in their lives. However, most Korean students seem not to be involved in with such a group of people. For Korean, a typical foreign language, English is only a trouble and a burden. Although most people in Korea have learned English for more than ten years, they have significant difficulties in dealing with English. Many people insist that the current situation in English education results from school system that have been entrenched in Korea for many years and students have suffered from it. In fact, such kinds of assertion have been suggested continuously, however, there is nothing has changed in English education. In this situation, an innovation of English education in Korea becomes an unavoidable matter, and it should be modified for students to nurture the ability to use English practically. However, if current English education system does not get to change in this way, Korea will fall on global society.

 

As English has had many impacts throughout the world for many centuries, English became an official and universal language and, we cannot deny the fact albeit we are nationalists. It is within bounds to say that English is inextricable from our lives. When we meet foreigners in the first time, we usually say "Hello. Pleased to meet you, where are you from? " in English without reference to a person's nationality. In fact, More than two billion people all over the world speak English and the number increases gradually(Carolin, 2014). So, if we want to be friends of two billion people all over the world, we should have the ability to can have command English. Also, as the dominant language in the world, English has actively been used in many fields such as science, information technology, business, seafaring, aviation, entertainment, radio, diplomacy, and etc.(Jardin Culturel,2013).

There are billions upon billions of websites on the internet nowadays, and it’s estimated that more than half of the entire online material( Robby,2014). And many public documents are published in English. So, we can have access to a vast store of knowledge if we nurture enough ability to understand materials written in English. Perhaps, the power of English will gradually be bigger and bigger. Therefore, we can say that conquering English, the dominant language, is the same with becoming a real global citizen who utilize and produce over- the- seas information.

 

According to EF, the biggest global educational company, Korea held 24th in the English Proficiency Index among the 60 countries where do not use English as the primary language (English First Research, 2012). Korean people have so ardent for English education that they spend approximately twenty thousand time for English education from elementary school to college. However, It does not seem to have developed in the English Proficiency Index for 6 years. As we can see the situation that Korean society counters, we should consider whether English education in Korea is being operated well or not. The countries where were ranked the highest levels are Finland and Sweden in northern Europe. Nonetheless the word order of those country's mother language is utterly different from that of English, most of the nations in Finland have a good command of English (p.28). Then, What happens in Korea? This is because Korea's traditional English instruction methods focus mainly on memorization and grammar, and less on learning how actually to communicate in English (Korean Herald, 2014). The fact shows how Korean should wake up and tear down the out of date form of Education.

 

First, current English education system is out of step with the internationalized times because it is still focusing on theoretical factors in English. As twenty-one century has arrived, the whole world has been entirely connected, and the global society is here now. Therefore, English has held its place as the official language so the ability to use English becomes more and more necessary. Today, world does want person who can express his or her knowledge and thoughts in English, but does not need person who mastered grammar entirely or memorized existing all vocabularies. However, unfortunately, English education in Korea is enacting with focusing on the Grammar- Translation Method. Such educational approach has forced most Korean students to be afraid of speaking and writing in English, or they have difficulty in practical use. However, according to an authoritative linguist, Stephen Krashen, he said that "language acquisition does not require extensive use of conscious grammatical rules, and does not require tedious drill."( Stephen D, 1988). It means that the grammar is not a prior thing to learn for the first time but the thing that is needed to be learned for adding flavor to English. According to Krashen, 'learning' is less important than 'acquisition'. Acquisition or acquired system is a process that occurs while one is unconscious as when the man learns his first language. So writing and speaking are involved in the scope. On the other hand, learning or education system is the product of formal instruction and it comprises a conscious process differently with the former. Knowledge of grammar rules is an example of learning(p.13). However, differently with the order that he suggested, English education system in Korea prioritizes learning on the acquisition and it makes students feel it hard to use English. They are so obsessed with finding grammatical errors and checking for some theoretical factors when they try to use English in reality. In other words, if this form of English education continues, Korean students must struggle in using English in practical ways.

 

Also, Korean students are evaluated their English proficiency with limited standards. As a person who has experienced the contradiction of Korean education in hand, I will tell a story about how English education in Korea is vulnerable. In most school in Korea, the value of English ability test has been degraded. The original purpose of English test is to evaluate how students has improved than before and how they understood the tasks taught in English class. However, nowadays test become to assess how perfectly a student memorizes the whole article and can find some tiny grammar errors. To enter desirable prestigious university, Korean students unavoidably should memorize the grammar patterns and vocabularies while feeling it is the wrong way. It shows how English education in Korea is limited and not advanced. However, it is also uncertain that the students can really master Reading Comprehension and Grammar ability through English class in school. In many cases, students just learn how to solve problems faster and they usually focus on acquiring skills for test.

 

Third, English education in Korea does not provide enough opportunities for students to understand English culture. There is a saying that if you want to learn a language of the country, then you should learn the culture of it earlier. It means the language is a product of a culture and it contains the spirits, cultures, and lifestyles of people who use the language. In a globalized age, first of all, it is important to understand the culture and to get close to English. To understand and feel sympathy with English culture, we can find other ways such as reading English literature or watching English movie, and sending or receiving letters with a pen pal in USA. In actually, Finland succeeded at English education with such an impressive English education method. Until 1980s, Finland also enacted Grammar-Translation Method like Korea, so they focused on grammar and reading. However, the government felt limitations and have changed English education format gradually, and eventually Finland came to discover the most effective language Education method for the students. After Finland abolished the old fashion of teaching method, Finland has focused on communication and activities, not a complicated grammar and test ( Educational Broadcast System Research, 2009). Though countries in northern Europe including Finland, Sweden, Norway are involved in expanding circle where does not use English as the primary language, about seventy percents of people have a good command of English ( Lee, 2008).What this occasion tells us is that Korea needs to change the English education that is just for entrance test of colleges and to strengthen the importance of cultural understanding. It can provide more opportunities for students to experience various English cultures firsthand and to participate actively in the global society as global citizens by acquiring more qualified English skills.

 

Some people might argue that there is no need for people who will get a job in Korea to do practical English. It is a probable refutation, but there is something they overlook. Korean government and lots of households in Korea spend tremendous time and money for English education. And Korean students should study English to enter school where they wanted and to make their future lives more amiable. Then, as long as Korean students are destined to learn English, it would be better to learn idiomatic English that can be used in usual as well as in exam or school. Also, because English is one of the most dominant languages in the world, if a person has the ability to can have command of English, the person have more opportunities and advantages that suggested in upper. Sometimes, they might oppose to my argument by saying that if we emphasize the use of English, we can even lose Korean language. However, such a concern is meaningless. It is because I did not revere the usage of English but asserted that English education in Korea should take innovations keeping the pace with the current of global society. In other words, current English system in Korea is the high cost, low efficiency. Therefore, it is time for English education to be changed. Also, with the matter of change, other can insist that the rapid changes in English education approach would bring about more confusions. There are not enough English teachers who are capable of taking a role for changed English education that start to focus on speaking and writing, and understanding cultures. Then, think about it, reversely. If we maintain such an old style format of English education, it must hamper the positive development of education in Korea. Regression will be brought by conservative thoughts of the older generation. And such a situation is highly fatal.

 

As the international dignity of Korea has been higher through active global participation, all people feel the necessity and importance of English. So with perceiving the importance of English, government extended English class and have emphasized English, but paradoxically English education in Korea rather hampers the learning of English. Although most Korean students have received regular English education course for about ten years (Land Mark Research , 2014) there are only a few people who have the ability to manage English freely when it is needed. It shows that how the accomplishment of English education in Korea falls short of expectations for the spent time and energy for it. English education in Korea goes against the flow of international trend. English education in Korea has the high cost but low efficiency. To analogize, consider a soldier deployed front lines who just studied about when a gun was produced, how many bullets go in that gun's magazine before battling, but actually do not know how to use gun in warfare. He died without any trial. This case is precisely the same with Korean English education and it does not help in global society. Korea is so concentrated on theoretical matters that discourage Koreans to use English in practical ways. And there are not reliable evaluation standards for English ability and it mostly is focused on solving issues. Last but not least, English education in Korea does not provide class for understanding English culture. Learning culture is greatly helpful for understanding other countries and help the person to have openness in global village. If my argument that current educational paradigm should go through an innovation is accepted, there would be beautiful synergy effects like opening the opportunities for Korean students to step forward to global society and for Korea to be active in the world. Therefore, to participate in a global society more actively, changes should be started from school, and it is the time for it. If the trend of English education is changed in Korea keeping pace with the current globalized society, finally it can make Korea have more manpower, and naturally the national development will be precipitated.

 

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Peer review for N.10

Topic: Is Jealousy one of the most dangerous emotions for human mind?

Introduction

  All of human are the animals that have ability of jealousy ,which is one of the most dangerous feelings we can experience. This strange emotion is revealed at some adages which are "The grass is always greener on the other side" and "Turning green with envy". Look around ourselves, now day, we can feel this emotion from our friends, families, teachers or some strars and so on. However, most of people did not regard jealousy was dangerous. Human usually think of fighting and killing is only happening between the animals. However, there is an example to show us people's jealousy is also very dangerous. There is a boy continuously proposing to a girl. But he makes her cloying. So, she deliberately makes a fake boyfriends to let him give up her. However, this behavior makes the boy jealousy. Finally, he cannot control his feeling to kill both of his lover and her mother at her house. After my story, I want to ask you a question, "How do you react when you feel jealousy?" Today,  I will insist "jealousy is one of the most dangerous emotions for human mind." to tell you about it. 

  

Narration

  There are most of people confused with the meaning of words which are "envy" and "jealousy", but these words are not the same things. Then, I define the meaning of them. When people feel envy, it is because they desire the possessions or qualities of another individual. Briefly, envy refers to wishing we had something that another person has. In contrast, jealousy the individual believes that something that somehow belongs to them is been given to somebody else. It also can be brief, jealousy refers to a fear of losing something we hav to another person. However, It is difficult to understand If I only define them in the words. Here are some examples to help you to understand easily. If an individual feels resentment because they do not have a beautiful wife like their friend then this would be described as envy. On the other hand, if they  that their own wife was having an affair with their friend then this would be jealousy. Are you sure different between the "envy" and "jealosy"? After that, you will be wonder why people feel jealousy and is it really dangerous for us? Feeling jealousy has many reasons. Typically, low self esteem, fear of being alone, past traumas and bad experiences, abnormal jealousy can be due to mental health problems, feelings of incurity an anxiety about the future and so on, all of these can raise the jealousy. Then, how dangerous? As I give an example in the introduction, the jealousy even can kill people to be a murder. Thus, there is an adage which is said by Havelock Ellis,

      

     "Jealousy, that dragon which slays love under the pretence of keeping it alive".

Jealousy is the most dangerous emotion for human mind. Can you feel that? Then, now, I will tell you more detail information about this topic and show you my arguments. 

Confirmation

  From now, we can feel that the dangerous of jealousy and the reasons why people feel jealousy. More detail I can separate them ( Who are them?) for three reasons. First, jealousy will hurt people. Moreover, I can separate the people for two types of them. They are myself and the others. Then, we are talking about the front one first. When you watch the Korean drama, some kinds of romantic movies and love story books, can you find some common? Yes! All of them reveal the emotion of jealousy. Examplarily, at the stories, there would be have love triangle. For example, if there is a girl who is a very pretty and kind, then there would be have two or more than two boys to fall in love. And then this girl will fall in love to one boy who is loving her among this group. Then, the other boys will feel jealousy. We also can see this happening at the drama: 

  Lately, at the most popular Korea drama "Qi Empress", we can find that at drama there are all of people feel jealousy to others. Like, the king of Yuan Dynasty is jealousy the king of Goryeo because the main girl character loves him. We can know he reveal this emotion for behaviors. However, the queen of Yuan Dynasty revealed her emotion by the behavior of killing through an assassination.

Like this example, we can know that they reveal their emotions through some actions such as hurting others or fall into someone to dangerous and so on. I refer the dangerous of jealousy that was because when this emotion get to abnormal and pathological levels that they can become dangerous not only to a friendship or relaionship but even life itself.Psychologist Shauna Spriner (Ph.D.), believes that jealousy tht is desturctive comes from deep rooted insecurity and lack of self esteem. At the moment, I insist that jealousy hurts the others and myself. Psychologist also argue that people who feel jealousy is due to lack of self esteem and lack of love from others. Morever, I think that is due to the behavior of comparing myself to other. If I finish some works through all my efforts,  I would be happy to finish them. However, If I compare it with others, I would thouht that "his resulf is better than me. I am poor at  all of them, I am fool." Gradually, those who compare themselves with others will feel despondency, even those will choose suicide. 

  Second, we accept the facts to distort due to jealousy.( 무슨 뜻이야? Second, we usually distort a fact because of jealousy toward others 이게 낫지 않아?)  People usually only hear and watch someone's the other side, for example, when the students talk about a very pretty super star. Then, you will say that her face is not the nature, because she did a plastic surgery. Like this, when you faced with a happening that makes you to feel jealousy, you will deny it. Here is an interesting story let you understand this happening: 

  There is one sweet potato and one potato. Walking around the roads, they see a beautiful glutinous rice cake. Potato says, " Glutinous rice cake is very pretty. Look, her face is so fluffy and white!" However, the sweet potato think of herself and jealousy her,( sweet potato is consumed with jealousy 이게 낫지 않을까?) says "She is not pretty!" Hearing the chatter, glutinous rice cake is shy and avoiding the space. At that time, sweet potato see some white powder fall out from glutinous rice cake's body and says, "Look, that is making up!"

How do you think about this happening? Is it interesting? Like this, the degree of jealousy from chatting between friends we can say it is a joke. However, If you were denying the facts at the Council or the Government, how would be happen? I can certainly our countries will happen a shameful thing.( I certainly believe that our country will counter a shameful event if it does.) Denying the facts will make many problems  that are our personal relationships or any political problems, even the result we cannot image.(?) I talked about jealousy will make some problems with our personal relationship. Therefore, we should control our emotion, jealousy, to prevent some problems.

  

  Finally, jealousy will raise social confusion. Most of our bad emotions are coming from jealousy. For instance, upset, angry, sadness, despair and so on, we can feel them through jealousy. However, we cannot believe that the first of child in the world is a murder.(in the Bible) He also jealousy his only brother to make this result. Here are the story about them.

  Temptation of Adam and Eve have two sons, they are Cain and Abel. Cain is a farmer and Abel is a shepherd boy. Both of them perform ancestral rites to God using their labor result. However, the God only accept Abel's one. That is because Cain only perform perfunctory, there is not any elaboration. But Cain cannot know his mistake, he is jealousy his brother. Finally, he kills his own brother, just due to jealousy.

Moreover, in the reality, there are also a lot of people killing others just due to jealousy, like Cain. We need to recognize our mistakes, thus, when we face with jealousy, first of all, it is not hurt or complain to others, it need to control your mind and contemplate yourself first. Then, it will not make any confusion for our society and country.

  

Rebuttal and concession

However, the opponents will argue that jealousy is not the most dangerous emotion for human mind, it will help us to have a motive for our behaviors, it means jealousy is our power. I concede their arguments. Because sometimes we get some motivation from jealousy. For example, there is a boy who have an older brother. When he saw his brother read books, the little boy also followed him to read book. This behavior is not only because of his curiosity, but also he jealousy his older brother due to his mothers' compliment. However, like these three opinions, I will not look best these brothers behaviors. The emotion, jealousy, is very dangerous, it also can build up. Moreover, this younger brothers' jealousy also can reveal to different types. For example, when the younger boy saw his brother make compliment from his mother. He will reveal his jealousy like tearing off his brother's books. For this reasons, sometimes I concede the opponents' arguments, but like this example, most of times show us the jealousy is the dangerous emotion.

Conclusion

   In brief, jealousy damages the mind and body of human, denies the facts and causes some problems. Therefore, I insist the jealousy is the most dangerous emotion for human mind. Then, there are not any solutions to solve this emotion? There some tips for you. When you experience jealousy, it means you are not trust yourself, you don't have any powerful confidence. To overcome it, you need to take some mind that you are every precious in the world and you are very valuable. If you cannot overcome yet, then how about talking with your friends? However, you also need to remember the dangerous of jealousy.

Bibliography

1. http://www.drgingerblume.com/Jealousy.a_dangerous_emotion.pdf
2. http://alcoholrehab.com/alcohol-rehab/jealousy-in-recovery/

3. http://hubpages.com/hub/Jealousy-The-Killer-Emotion

5 points

• Technically perfect

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays an interesting and unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Thought provoking and captivating

• Clearly the product of extensive drafting and research

4 points

• Technically perfect

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Clearly the product of thorough drafting and research

3 points

• Follows the classical argument

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

• Some evidence of drafting and research

2 points

• Displays a unique perspective on a highly specialized topic

0 points

• Incomplete or inadequate

Grade
According to the rubric above, what grade would you give this essay, why?   -

3 points. I want to say that the topic of this essay is really connected with our lives. Your essay follows the classical argument format well and contains some evidence of drafting and research. I'm sure that you put a tremendous amount of effort to write this essay. I think you did well so far, but there are somethings you should change for getting 2 more points. Now I will tell you why I gave you 3 points for you 2nd draft. First, there are quite a lot of sentences that disturb the meanings that you wanted to say. So, I think your essay would be better if you correct some sentences and style based on my suggestion. Second,I don't think that others will refute your argument because jealousy is naturally on alert by people. I would like to suggest that if you want to maintain your thesis, then, in the part of rebuttal, It would be better to say like " opponent people do not think jealousy is the most dangerous feeling for human mind .. and the feeling that other people think the most dangerous is"............................................................................

How does this essay need to improve to get a better grade?
 First, there are quite a lot of sentences that disturb the meanings that you wanted to say. So, I think your essay would be better if you correct some sentences and style based on my suggestion. Second,I don't think that others will refute your argument because jealousy is naturally on alert by people. I would like to suggest that if you want to maintain your thesis, then, in the part of rebuttal, It would be better to say like " opponent people do not think jealousy is the most dangerous feeling for human mind .. and the feeling that other people think the most dangerous is".Also, i think you should correct your grammar mistakes to help readers to understand it more comfortable.....................


Thesis
What is the thesis?

jealousy is one of the most dangerous emotions for human mind.
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Is the thesis clear and debatable?

The thesis is clear but not debatable.
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If you (The reviewer) wrote this essay, how would you have written the thesis?
Any other thoughts?

Jealousy is the most dangerous emotions among human mind. ..................................................................................................................................................

Classical Argument
Can you easily identify the 5 parts of the classical argument? If no, what parts are missing?
Yes, i can. I already marked it..
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Does the introduction catch your attention? Does it comfortably lead to the thesis? 


.Yes, it contains interesting stories and adages that can help readers' understanding. But, i cannot find the reason why the author said about the story. I don't think the story is not relevant your thesis. I would be better if you connect the captivating story and your thesis. .......................

Does the narration give all the necessary background information to understand the topic?

Frankly speaking, I did not know the differences between "envious" and " jealous". It was good,  only this thing, it is not enough. I recommend you add what makes you think the jealousy is the most dangerous feeling in human .... For example, It would be good if you talk about other feelings are not as dangerous as jealousy.

Does the confirmation adequately support the thesis?
Yes, it is.

Does the refutation and concession address a realistic counterpoint? Does it adequately dispute the counterpoint, or respond in a reasonable manner? 
-  I think your refutation is a little weak than your opponents' argument. So I think you should think more about the expected counter arguments and refute them. I don't think it is enough.
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Does the conclusion summarize the article and address the larger significance of the thesis? 


I think you should summarize your argument again. In your conclusion, there are only your suggestions.
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What suggestions do you have for improving the classical argument structure?

 I want to say that the topic of this essay is really connected with our lives. Your essay follows the classical argument format well and contains some evidence of drafting and research. I'm sure that you put a tremendous amount of effort to write this essay. I think you did well so far, but there are somethings you should change for getting 2 more points. Now I will tell you why I gave you 3 points for you 2nd draft. First, there are quite a lot of sentences that disturb the meanings that you wanted to say. So, I think your essay would be better if you correct some sentences and style based on my suggestion. Second,I don't think that others will refute your argument because jealousy is naturally on alert by people. I would like to suggest that if you want to maintain your thesis, then, in the part of rebuttal, It would be better to say like " opponent people do not think jealousy is the most dangerous feeling for human mind .. and the feeling that other people think the most dangerous is".

 First, there are quite a lot of sentences that disturb the meanings that you wanted to say. So, I think your essay would be better if you correct some sentences and style based on my suggestion. Second,I don't think that others will refute your argument because jealousy is naturally on alert by people. I would like to suggest that if you want to maintain your thesis, then, in the part of rebuttal, It would be better to say like " opponent people do not think jealousy is the most dangerous feeling for human mind .. and the feeling that other people think the most dangerous is".Also, i think you should correct your grammar mistakes to help readers to understand it more comfortable

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Persuasion
When you started reading the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis? 
I have never thought of the thesis. 
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When you finished the essay, did you agree or disagree with the thesis?
I do not agree with the thesis.
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If your mind changed, why? What parts of the essay were persuasive?
Although i did not change my mind, the examples and research was compelling to persuade other people.
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How could the author enhance the persuasive parts of their essay?

I think it can be the great persuasive essay if you articulate the first, second, third reasons why jealousy is the most dangerous feeling and why the other feelings like envy ,greed, obsession are not as dangerous as it.
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Research
Is the author using research effectively? 
Yes................................................................................................................................

Is the research from appropriate sources?
I think so. But i think you need more research to strengthen you narration and rebuttal and concession part...................................................................................................................................................

Are the sources obvious?
Yes. they are.
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Are the pieces of evidence relevant to the thesis or essay?
Yes. But i don't know why the author talked about the difference between jealousy and envy. ..................................................................................................................................................

Are there any parts of the essay that need evidence to support the claims?

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