Week 11- Self Evalution

1) What score do you think you deserve? Here is the rubric:

2 points - The first draft is thoughtful and a good start to an effective persuasive essay. It demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument.

1 point - The student completes a first draft that demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument

0 points - The first draft is inadequate

I think I would get 2 points with my first draft. My essay is thoroughly thoughtful and a good start to an effective persuasive essay. Although there would be some differences with Sam teachers' requirements, I wrote the first draft with conforming the format that teacher suggested. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

2) What did you do well?

I think I did well in the part of confirmation. In confirmation, I wrote my first draft by using almost materials from researching process. I think I was good at understanding the problem of the situation and my argument. With the argument that English education in school should be changed for Korean students to  bring up the ability for English composition, I deployed it in quite a logical way. First, I refer what kind of our country's English education hinders the students' the capacity for English composition. Next, I  suggested some quotations and researches from gurus. Third, I described the current circumstances that occurs in Korea against the opinions of researchers. In this way, I think I did a quite good job in confirmation.

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arguments are based off of opinions and personal feelings.
3) What could you have done better?

It leaves me much to be desired in the part of "Refutation and_Confirmation". If I searched more about the opposite arguments and I tried to suggest more compelling refutation, I could be better. Also, the Refutation and Concession are relatively shorter than other parts of first draft. So, for the next time, I will make the part more logical and longer. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?

 I think I did well in the part of confirmation. In confirmation, I wrote my first draft by using almost materials from researching process. I think I was good at understanding the problem of the situation and my argument. With the argument that English education in school should be changed for Korean students to  bring up the ability for English composition, I deployed it in quite a logical way. First, I refer what kind of our country's English education hinders the students' the capacity for English composition. Next, I  suggested some quotations and researches from gurus. Third, I described the current circumstances that occurs in Korea against the opinions of researchers. In this way, I think I did a quite good job in confirmation.
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5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?

I think my researches are not enough to persuade the high- ranking public officials who are engaging in the Ministry of Education. So, I think i need more sources to strengthen my argument. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

6) What's your strategy to make your second draft better?
_I will make my second draft better based on more compelling and convincing researches. Accepting sam teacher's feedback, I am not going to limit the content only with English composition but going to write about overall limitations  Korean English education system. 
Therefore, I changed my thesis to " Korea will fall behind global society if English education in Korea does not get to change." _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

Feedback for 1st draft

First Draft 2 Points

Very interesting thesis. It is relevant to the world today. You could improve it by suggesting HOW to change the English education system. 

Great narration. You could improve it by discussing research or theories explaining why Korean students struggle with English, not just your opinions.

You're doing a fantastic job marking your sources - That will make your life easier in 2 weeks =P

You could add flavor to this essay by adding personal examples to support your essay. Normally this would not be appropriate for a formal essay, but because you have first hand experience with the Korean English education system, you can talk about your experiences. Great job so far, I look forward to seeing your second draft.


Teacher, accepting your advice, i changed my thesis a little bit. It is " Korea will behind the global society if English education in Korea does not get to change". The reason why I changed my thesis is because the original essay focused more on overall English education in Korea and the researches are more related with the overall problem of English education in Korea. So there would be some changes..... But Sam teacher, please consider it.

First draft

 

There is a famous saying that "Language is a process of free creation" said by an authoritative linguist, Noam Chomsky. It means that through learning and using languages, human beings have been able to expand the scope of their thinking and to make many creative developments in their lives. However, most Korean students seem to be not involved into such a group of people, rather they regard learning language as a trouble and a burden. Actually, although most people in Korea who completed regular course have learned English for more than 10 years, they have big difficulties on writing even one sentence. However, this situation can be attributed to a deeply entrenched English education system in Korea such as teaching by rote. Therefore, English education system in Korea should be changed for students to bring up their ability for English composition.

 

According to EF, the biggest global educational company, korea held 24th in the English Proficiency Index among the 60 countries where do not use English as the main language. Korean people have so tremendous ardor for English education that they spend approximately twenty thousands time for English education from elementary school to college. However, there were not apparent development in the English Proficiency Index for 6 years. It is because of the education system are centered with memorizing vocabulary and grammar rules so they are bad at writing and speaking in English. As we can see the situation that Korean society has countered, I thought we should be able to consider whether English education in korea is operated well or not.

A series of researches show that changing English education system  is not a easy problem because it has been entrenched for a long time in korea. However, having difficulties on writing is a general burden that people all around the world feel commonly. According to Richards, Regina G. Richards, the head of Richards Educational Therapy Center, some students dislike writing because they have hard time getting started and they feel that the paper never turns out the way they want. Others dislike writing because they have nothing to deliver and talk about, or, due to the lack of material. The other people hate composition because they are suffering from linguistic disorder. Like this, we can know that there are distinctive reasons why students are frustrated on writing. The sources show us the hardship of writing is not the only problem of Korean students, but what important is that a conservative English education system in korea does not provide any opportunities for students to be familiar with English composition. However, in this situation, if my argument is accepted and the trend of English education is changed in Korea, it can make korea have bigger manpower and precipitate the approaching into global society.

First, English education in Korea is too focus on the theoretical factors to influence negatively  English composition. However, according to an authoritative linguist ,Stephen Krashen, he said that "language acquisition does not require extensive use of conscious grammatical rules, and does not require tedious drill." It means that grammar is not a prior thing to learn for the first time but a thing that is needed to be learn for refined writing. http://www.sk.com.br/sk-krash.html

Krashen separated the concepts of " acquisition" and " learning". Both of them seem to be the same thing, but there are some differences between them in his reasoning. According to Krashen, 'learning' is less important than 'acquisition'. Acquisition or acquired system is a process that occurs while one is unconscious as when the man acquires his first language. So writing and speaking are involved in the scope. On the other hand, learning or learning system is the product of formal instruction and it comprises a conscious process differently with the former.  Knowledge of grammar rules is an example of learning. However, differently with the order that he suggested, English education system in korea prioritize learning on the acquisition. Therefore, the educational trend makes korean students struggle with the English composition and they feel it hard because they are obsessed with finding grammatical error and emphasizing with some theoretical parts, rather they really use English to write a essay.

Second, Korean educational trend decreases the students' creativity that is needful for English composition. One of the main problems that makes writing hard for Korean students is because they can not find a creative material to talk about. According to a research conducted by ETH Swiss Federal Institute of Technology Zurich, Chair of Technology and Innovation Management , physical activity is an important part of bring up creativity and innovations. Also, some experts noted that to develop a cognitive ability and creativity, we should train our brain and the best way to train brain is "reading books". Like this, there is also a different way for nurturing creativity.   However, unfortunately, today's korean students say that they have no enough time to read books as well as do physical activities. It is because korean students contribute their time for conducting academy assignments and also some parents dislike that their children read a book with the concern that it might hinder  school study . They often say "you'd rather to memorize vocabulary for during that time." Therefore, in this educational trend, Korean students start to learn English from very young ages and study with rote, with losing creativity. http://conference.pixelonline.net/edu_future/common/download/Paper_pdf/ITL59-Baumann.pdf

   http://www.gjdream.com/v2/news/view.html?news_type=202&uid=460297

 

Third, education in korea make korean students be obsessed with perfectionism inclination. Perfectionism may seem to be a really important and valuable thing, but it is a thing that should be disposed when a person try to English composition. Perfectionists suffer from an obsession they should make it perfectly, even though they write just a sentence. However, if they are not satisfied with their works, they would correct the sentence until they are satisfied. However, if things do not work out well with their plan, they feel distressed and lose confidence and a slight feeling of interest.http://sass.queensu.ca/wpcontent/uploads/sites/2/2013/12/Perfectionism-in-Writing.pdf

   Surprisingly, according to a researcher of Newspaper In Education, yeonsu kim, the older generation is responsible for students' perfectionism in writing because older people only have had interests in pointing grammatical errors and logical leaps. Therefore, frustrated with evaluation from their English teacher or parents, they come to feel afraid with English composition and can not start it confidently. This situation so gives students a burden and fear for writing that students feel it more difficulty than the reality and eventually brings about the consequences that the students conduct their stuff poorly.

 http://www.ihalla.com/read.php3?aid=1408978800473067193

 

Some people who disagree with my argument can argue that the reason why students are struggling with English composition is just because they are not native speakers. It is right to some extent. It is a natural thing that we have trouble in writing and speaking extraneously in English because we are Korean, not English-speaking-pupils. However, there are some important thing that opponents neglect. They do not consider the time that Korean spend for English education. Although we are not native speakers, if we spend such a tremendous time and energy for it, so we should be able to confidently make at least a sentence in English. It is  very ridiculous that most Korean people who have a degree are good at grammar and Reading Comprehension but they can not write even a sentence in English. Also, they can oppose to my argument by saying the rapid changes in English education form would bring about more confusions. There are not enough English teachers who can play a role for English composition and more advanced works on students' tasks. However, if we maintain such an old style format of English education will hampers the positive development of education in Korea. Regression will be brought by conservative thoughts of the older generation.

We can easily see adults who enroll in English academy where they can learn about English composition and speaking. The reason why they become students again after graduating high school is because there were some limits of English education system in school in korea.  Although most korean students receive regular English education course for about 10 years, there are only a few people who have the ability to build sentences with English. It shows that the accomplishment of English education in korea falls short of expectations for the spent time and energy for English education. What researchers say commonly is that this situation is the result of the conservative English education system that has been only existed in Korea. Like this, There are some problems that should be changed for students' capacity to write in English. The first one is that English education in korea is concentrated on theoretical matters that make English composition hard. And the second is that creativity that is needed to find proper materials for essay is suppressed by the education in Korea.The third is the education make Korean students have perfectionism inclination that is needless in English writing. However, If my argument that current educational paradigm should be gone through an innovation is accepted, there would be wonderful synergy effects like opening the opportunities for Korean students to step forward to global society. Therefore, to participate in global society more actively, changes should be started from school and it is the time for it.

The perfectionism in writing

Source:

http://sass.queensu.ca/wp-content/uploads/sites/2/2013/12/Perfectionism-in-Writing.pdf
Perfectionism in writing


http://bitesizebio.com/517/perfectionism-are-you-on-the-downward-spiral/
Perfectionism: Are you on the downward spiral?
by Nick Oswald on 21st of April, 2008 in Personal Development/

My Topic:

Today's English Education in Korea Hinders the Students' Capacity to speak and write in English.

What I hope to learn from this source:

I want to find some information that can demonstrate the correlation between perfectionism and the writing.

Notes: 
1. 'Perfectionism' occurs what-Feeling dissatisfied with the quality of the product (both incomplete and completed work) & Feeling judged about the writing -> If they are not satisfied at their works, they feels DISTRESSED. -> Can't start writing. -> Spend tremendous time for writing. ->
Working at the last minute: you may miss sleep or other obligations in order to 
complete writing, or you may not have time for proof reading and editing.
-> lose confidence and a slight feeling of interest

2. What perfectionists neglect is
 "Failure is the opportunity to begin again more intelligently." (Benjamin 
Disraeli)
 "Take a chance and you may lose. Take not a chance and you have lost 
already." (Soren Kierkegaard)

3. Things to try for overcoming perfectionism 

• Focus on quality of works rather than quantity ( Don't be depressed when you couldn't make it great as time you spent)
• Accept that it's ok for me not to write quickly.  (Give yourself the time to learn them and the mental breathing space to be able to objectively look at the problem, with the help of others if possible.)
• Accept that it's ok to not get the right result. It's an experiment after all (if you got the result you expected every time, it's wouldn't be an experiment, would it?)

Final thoughts

I am happy to meet my goal. Through this source, i could find correlation between writing and perfectionism. I think as soon as i might approach to begin writing about the topic while 

First draft: The Conclusion

Conclusion1

Many korean students are struggling with English composition and we can find the reasons what made the situation by tracing the unique English education in korea. From quite a long times ago, there have been many trials for innovations on the English educational system in korea, however, it does not seem to have apparent resolution for the problem of English education in korea. Now, it is time for current English education in Korea to be changed for students to bring up English composition skill. Recently, as the world become a global society , the capacity of practical use of language ( English writing) has been important. However, there are still many aspects that hinders the capacity to do composition in English. The first one is that English education in korea is too concentrated on theoretical matters that make English composition hard. And The second is that  creativity that is needed to find proper materials is suppressed by the education in Korea.The third is the education make Korean students have perfectionism inclination that is needless in English writing. If my argument that current educational paradigm should be gone through an  innovation is not accepted, such a strange form of education will be continued and the more serious thing is that Korean students may feel limits for challenging and stepping forward to global society due to the lack of the ability to use English in normal lives. Therefore, changes should be started in school for the idiomatic English.

Conclusion2

We can easily see adults who enroll in  English academy where they can learn about English composition and speaking. The reason why they become students again after graduating high school is because there were some limits of English education system in Korea. However, it is a little strange fact.
Although most korean students received regular English education course for about 10 years, there are only a few people who have the ability to build sentences with English. It shows that the accomplishment of English education in korea falls short of expectations for the spent time and energy for English education. What  researchers say commonly is that this situation is the result of the conservative English education system that has been only existed in Korea. Like this, There are some problems that should be changed for students' capacity to write in English. The first one is that English education in korea is concentrated on theoretical matters that make English composition hard. And the second is that creativity that is needed to find proper materials for essay is suppressed by the education in Korea.The third is the education make Korean students have perfectionism inclination that is needless in English writing. However, If my argument that current educational paradigm should be gone through an  innovation is accepted, there would be wonderful synergy effects like opening the opportunities for Korean students to step forward to global society. Therefore, to participate in global society more actively, changes should be started from school and it is the time for it.

First draft: Refutation and Concession

 

 

1. What is my thesis?

English education system in Korea should be changed for students to bring up their ability for English composition.

2. What is the opposite position?

English education system in korea has no responsibility to teach English composition.

3. What arguments can I anticipate?

a)  The reason why Korean students are poor at English composition is because we are not native speaker.

b) There are not enough people who have ability to teach English composition as a regular course to all Korean students.

c) Current English education is the idealistic form

4. How will I counter those arguments?

a) 1. concede to some extents, i will refer to some important thing the opponents neglect.

b) If we can not change the current English education in  Korea with the reason,,,, as a reaction for those argument , i will ask them you guys would everyday avoid problems. 
c) Recent declaration - The minister of ministry of Education

The rebuttal and concession

Some people who disagree with my argument can argue that the reason why students are struggling with English composition is just because they are not native speakers.It is right to some extent. It is a natural thing that we have trouble in writing and speaking extraneously in English because we are Korean, not English-speaking-pupils.  However, there are something that opponents neglect. They do not consider the time that Korean spend for English education. Although we are not native speakers, if we spend such a tremendous time and energy for it, we should be able to confidently make at least a sentence in English. This situation that most Korean people who have a degree averagely are good at Grammar and Reading Comprehension but they can not write just a sentence in English is very strange.

 

 

First draft: The Confirmation

1. What is my thesis?

 English education system in Korea should be changed for students to bring up their ability for English composition.

2. What types of source am I using to defend my thesis? 

I am using some authorities' saying and fact

3. Are my arguments mostly based on evidence, logic or emotion?

I think almost my arguments are mostly based on evidence , in fact. However, i think details for my second argument are not enough. So, to make it as a more compelling persuasive essay, i have to add more evidence and statistical numbers.

My Confirmation

First, English education in Korea is too focus on the theoretical factors to influence negative impacts on English composition.  However, according to a authoritative linguist ,Stephen Krashen, he said that "language acquisition does not require extensive use of conscious grammatical rules, and does not require tedious drill."  It means that grammar is not a prior thing to learn for the first time but a thing that is needed to be learn for refined writing. http://www.sk.com.br/sk-krash.html Krashen separated the concept of " acquisition" and " learning". Both of them seem to be the same thing, but there are some differences between them in his reasoning. According to Krashen, 'learning' is less important than 'acquisition'. Acquisition or acquired system is a process that occurs while one is unconscious as when the man acquires his first language. On the other hand, learning or learning system is the product of formal instruction and it comprises a conscious process differently with the former. For example knowledge of grammar rules. However, differently with the order that he suggested, English education system in korea prioritize learning on the acquisition. Therefore, the educational trend makes korean students struggle with the English composition because they are obsessed with finding grammatical error and emphasizing with some theoretical parts, rather they really write in English.

 

 

Second, Korean educational trend decreases the students' creativity that are needful for English composition. One of the main problems that makes writing hard for Korean students is because they can not find a creative material to talk about. According to a research conducted by ETH Swiss Federal Institute of Technology Zurich, Chair of Technology and Innovation Management , physical activity is an important part of bring up creativity and innovations. And there is also a different way for nurture creativity. Some experts noted that to develop a cognitive ability and creativity, we should train our brain and the best way to train brain is "reading books".
 However, unfortunately, today's korean students say that they have no enough time to read books as well as  do physical activities parents. It is because korean students contribute their time for conducting academy assignments and also some parents dislike that their children read a book  because they concern it is a useless thing  and say "you'd rather to  memorize  vocabulary for that time." Therefore, in this educational trend, Korean students start to learn English from very young ages and study with rote.-> decrease creativity. Also, students who are not interested in reading books are more likely to have difficulties on expressing their thoughts and using various words what they want to say.

 http://conference.pixel-online.net/edu_future/common/download/Paper_pdf/ITL59-Baumann.pdf

 http://www.gjdream.com/v2/news/view.html?news_type=202&uid=460297

 

 

Third, education in korea make korean students be obsessed with  perfectionism inclination.

Perfectionism may seem to be a really important and valuable thing, but it is a thing that should be disposed when a person try to English composition. Perfectionists suffer from an obsession they should make it perfectly, even though they write just a sentence. However, if they are not satisfied with their works, they would correct the sentence until they are satisfied. However, if things do not work out well with their plan, they feel distressed and  lose confidence and a slight feeling of interest.

http://sass.queensu.ca/wp-content/uploads/sites/2/2013/12/Perfectionism-in-Writing.pdf

Surprisingly, according to a researcher of Newspaper In Education, yeonsu kim, the older generation is responsible for students' perfectionism in writing because older people only have had interests in pointing grammatical errors and logical leaps. Therefore, frustrated with evaluation from their English teacher or parents, they come to feel afraid with English composition and can not start it confidently.

http://www.ihalla.com/read.php3?aid=1408978800473067193

This situation so gives students a burden and fear for writing that students feel it more difficulty than the reality and eventually brings about the consequence that the students conduct their stuff poorly.

First draft : The narration

My persuasive argument thesis is: English education system in Korea should be changed for students to bring up their ability for English composition.

1. What do people already know about my topic?

Many people in Korea have already felt serious problems in Korean educational system. However various matters in education system have risen continuously , any apparent resolutions or idealistic educational policies  are not arranged so far. In this situation, I think most of people already know it very well and they might agree with my topic that Korean education hampers students' ability to speak and write in English, namely, they can not approach English essentially.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

.-http://www.naeil.com/news_view/?id_art=114343//http://www.tuntunsquare.com/

    http://www.ihalla.com/read.php3?aid=1408978800473067193
   I mixed 3 sources to explain  and show well the situation Korea is in.
  -http://www.sk.com.br/sk-krash.html
   In this source, I could find some results of experiments that are conducted by Stephen Krashen. Those are enough to attract interests.

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

If i'm right, Korean government should go through an innovation and  changes in education system. Especially, the current course of English learning must be changed for the first time. However, if people ignore my argument albeit my argument is right , such a Korean conservative trends in Education must be maintained. Then, it will react really be harmful for the global society. The ability to build up a sentence in English is really important and useful for stepping forward in to a broader world.

My Narration

According to EF, the biggest global educational company, korea held 24th in the English Proficiency Index among the 60 countries where do not use English as the main language. Korean people have so tremendous ardor for English education that they spend approximately 2 billion time for English education from elementary school to college. However, there were not visual development in the English Proficiency Index for 6 years. It is because of the education system that are centered with memorizing vocabulary and grammar rules so they are bad at writing and speaking in English. As we can see the situation that Korean society has countered, I thought we should be able to consider whether English education in korea is operated well or not.

A series of researches shows that changing English education system  is not a easy problem because it has been entrenched for a long time in korea. To look out for the fundamental matter that korean society is struggling, I started researching with general occasions that also involve not only korean but also general kids and I narrowed the extent to foucus on the case of korean students who feel hard to do English composition. my argument is accepted and the trend of English education is changed in Korea, it can make korea have bigger manpower and precipitate the approaching into global society.

Having difficulties on writing is a general burden that people all around the world feel commonly. According to Richards, Regina G. Richards, the head of Richards Educational Therapy Center, some students dislike writing because they have hard time getting started and they feel that the paper never turns out the way they want. Others dislike writing because they have nothing to deliver and talk about, or, due to the lack of material. The other people hate composition because they are suffering from linguistic disorder. Like this, we can know that there are distinctive reasons why students are frustrated on writing. This source shows us the hardship of writing is not the only problem of Korean students, but what important is that a conservative English education system in korea does not provide any opportunities for students to be familiar with English composition.

 

 

First draft: The Introduction

The introduction 

There is a famous saying that "Language is a process of free creation" said by an authoritative linguist, Noam Chomsky. It means that through learning and using languages, human beings have been able to expand the scope of their thinking and to make many creative developments in their lives. However, most Korean students seem to be not involved into such a group of people, rather they regard learning language as a trouble and a burden. Actually, although most people in Korea who completed regular course have learned English for more than 10 years, they have big difficulties on writing even one sentence. However, this situation can be attributed to a deeply entrenched English education system in Korea such as teaching by rote. Therefore, English education system in Korea should be changed for students to bring up their ability for English composition.

1. Attention grabber -
I attracted the audience by using a quotation of a famous linguist , Noam Chomsky. I expanded the attention grabber and explain my topic more naturally.

2. Explains the topic -
I explained my topic by showing current situation where Korean is stuck with. -However ,~~~~ 

3. My thesis -
It is clear, direct and an argument. I thought the argument " English education in Korea hinders the students' capacity to write in English" but i changed it to a better argument, "Current English education in Korea should be changed for students' ability to bring up English composition."

Outline:

1. The introduction, which warms up the audience, establishes goodwill and rapport with the readers, and announces the general theme or thesis of the argument.

I will start the introduction by delivering a famous saying that told by a authoritative linguist Noam Chomsky: Language is a process of free creation. And next, naturally I will talk about the current English education system in Korea and I will show some negative aspects of it. Then, as thesis statement, " English education in Korea should experience changes for the students' capacity to  write in English." will be written.

2. The narration, which summarizes relevant background material, provides any information the audience needs to know about the environment and circumstances that produce the argument, and set up the stakes-what’s at risk in this question. In academic writing, this often takes the form of a literature review.

In the first part of the narration, I will suggest a current circumstances that made me produce such an argument. ( The result of experiment that is conducted by EF, the biggest English education company) Then, I will summarizes relevant materials that searched before.

3. The confirmation,which lays out in a logical order (usually strongest to weakest or most obvious to most subtle) the claims that support the thesis, providing evidence for each claim.

I will write the confirmation part roughly like this.  First, people have studied English only to get good score in the college entrance test. Second, some Korean education hinders students' creativity. Third, parents and language instructor tend to focus on the superficial result. More in details, i will use Krashen's theory for the first reason. And next, i will suggest the correlation between the average amount of reading books and writing. (-Think) In third reason, I will show readers  how perfectionism affects in writing.

4. The refutation and concession, which looks at opposing viewpoints to the writer’s claims, anticipating objections from the audience, and allowing as much of the opposing viewpoints as possible without weakening the thesis.

I will concede that the basic reason why Korean students are struggling with English composition is because we are not native speaker. However, i will explain this situation completely different with what they thoughts. With the invested money for English education in Korea in mind, the opponent can not say like it is a natural thing. 

5. The summation, which provides a strong conclusion, amplifying the force of the argument,  and showing the readers that this solution is the best at meeting the circumstances.

I will insist again that English education in Korea should be experienced some changes for the students' capacity to write in English. Next, i will summarize the contents of the confirmation part. And not just a summary, i will show the implications and the synergy effects after my argument is accepted. 

Articulation

1) My argument Write your argument in one sentence. Then, spend some time explaining it. 
I want to argue that current English education system should be changed because it   hinders students' capacity for English composition. As I've lived in Korea for about 20 years, i have felt that there are many problems in education system in Korea society. However, among of them, this time, i want to write about English composition because it is a problem  that all students in our school are struggling with. 

2) How I found my argument Explain how your research helped you find your argument. Or, in other words, how did your research evolve into your argument? Start with your research question.
Before I certainly decided what i should research, I started with the question that why general students are struggling with English composition and Is there any resolutions for the situation. First, i started researching with general occasions that are also involved in not only Korean but also general kids and I narrowed the extent by degrees to focus on the case of Korean students who feel hard to do English composition.  

3) New research questions What do you still need to know? What is your research plan?
I have several questions that need to be resolved.

a) Psychological factor that hinders the English composition

b) The correlation between creativity and writing

c) The expected synergy effect if there is a change in English education in Korea



4) Connections to the Harvard Sampler How is your argument connected to the Harvard Sampler? ANY CONNECTION IS VALID. Please focus on choosing a good argument first, then think about how it is related to the Harvard Sampler. I will help you think of the connection if necessary.

I will connect my topic with human's psychology and cognitive characteristics in the process of learning English. Then, I will explain how the old style of English education in Korea made students' brain do not  think and step backward.

Stephen Krashen's Theory of Second Language Acquisition

Source:

http://www.sk.com.br/sk-krash.html

Stephen Krashen's Theory of Second Language Acquisition

Ricard Schutz (June 12, 2014)

My Topic:
Today's English Education in Korea Hinders the Students' Capacity to speak and write in English.

What I hope to learn from this source: I want to find the idealist way of acquiring second language that suggested by linguist. And I want to find the essence of learning language.

I want to extract some research results of a authoritative linguist, Stephen Krashen.

Notes:

1. "Language acquisition does not require extensive use of conscious grammatical rules, and does not require tedious drill." Stephen Krashen
2. "Acquisition requires meaningful interaction in the target language - natural communication - in which speakers are concerned not with the form of their utterances but with the messages they are conveying and understanding."Stephen Krashen

3.  According to Krashen, 'learning' is less important than 'acquisition'. Acquisition and learning seems to be the same but they are a little different. Acquisition or acquired system is a process that occurs while one is unconscious as when the man acquires his first language. On the other hand, learning or learning system is the product of formal instruction and it comprises a conscious process differently with the former.For example knowledge of grammar rules.

4. Learning grammar is for monitoring  not for priority. The role of the monitor is - or should be - minor, being used only to correct expression from 'so so' speech and to give speech a more 'polished' appearance.

5. But, the most important thing that should be accomplished in the first place is to make children feel interest.

Final thoughts
This source can be used for details in first paragraph of my essay.  

English education in Korea

Source:

1. http://www.naeil.com/news_view/?id_art=114343

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3. http://www.tuntunsquare.com/

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My Topic:
Today's English Education in Korea Hinders the Students' Capacity to speak and write in English.

What I hope to learn from this source:

I want to find some information that can expand on ideas and details for my writing. Especially, this time, as I noted before, I hope to learn somethings focused on Korean students and current education in Korea.

Notes:

 1.  The order of teaching English 
    Listening, speaking, reading, writing (-Stephen D krashen, <<The power of   reading>> -Natural Approach )
Therefore, according to the authority, learning grammar and vocabulary are not top priority and additional factors that can be learned by natural for language development. 


  2. English education in Korea

- English is taught only to get good score for the college entrance test.  Because of the Korean current educational system, most of Korean students are not able to use English practically, as opposed to they are focusing on grammar, vocabulary and the English for just the college entrance.   

- With the English education in Korea in mind, it seems to hinder Korean students'  creativity and capacity to speak and write extemporaneously. One of the main problems is because Korean students are undergoing a lack of materials to talk about. It is because Korean students are not used to thinking and creating some ideas for themselves but used to learning by rote. Also, decreasing the amount of book also influences on that problem. 
-  In foreign language education, Parents' behaviors have a great impact on their kids' interests and development on English. However, most of Korean parents are more likely to focus on output that made by their kids and they often express negative emotions against that. It is a really dangerous behavior that can completely deprive the kids of any interests and confidences about English. 

 3.  Perfectionism 

Many Korean students are perfectionist who have a obsession that though I write just one sentence and even a word , I should make it perfectly. This feeling makes the potential writer be afraid of writing, so the person can not display his or her writing abilities.

4. The amount of reading books

Students who are not interested in reading books are more likely to have difficulties on expressing their thoughts and using various words what they want to say. Also, they have less imagination and story subjects than students who enjoy reading books. -> The amount of reading books  ∝ The ability of writing
Therefore, it is important for students to make habit to read books at least for 10 minutes.

 5. Bringing up the power of think

Most of Korean students have a busy life that they have no enough time to think and envision about something. -> It can decrease students' ability to think. 
Therefore, it is important for instructors to help children to express their thoughts and to see broader world.


Final thoughts

I think this 3 sources really helped me a lot. Thanks to these sources, i think i can articulate my essay. Umm...... I will research about more details and some quotations that can strengthen my arguments for next  research.