First draft: The Conclusion

Conclusion1

Many korean students are struggling with English composition and we can find the reasons what made the situation by tracing the unique English education in korea. From quite a long times ago, there have been many trials for innovations on the English educational system in korea, however, it does not seem to have apparent resolution for the problem of English education in korea. Now, it is time for current English education in Korea to be changed for students to bring up English composition skill. Recently, as the world become a global society , the capacity of practical use of language ( English writing) has been important. However, there are still many aspects that hinders the capacity to do composition in English. The first one is that English education in korea is too concentrated on theoretical matters that make English composition hard. And The second is that  creativity that is needed to find proper materials is suppressed by the education in Korea.The third is the education make Korean students have perfectionism inclination that is needless in English writing. If my argument that current educational paradigm should be gone through an  innovation is not accepted, such a strange form of education will be continued and the more serious thing is that Korean students may feel limits for challenging and stepping forward to global society due to the lack of the ability to use English in normal lives. Therefore, changes should be started in school for the idiomatic English.

Conclusion2

We can easily see adults who enroll in  English academy where they can learn about English composition and speaking. The reason why they become students again after graduating high school is because there were some limits of English education system in Korea. However, it is a little strange fact.
Although most korean students received regular English education course for about 10 years, there are only a few people who have the ability to build sentences with English. It shows that the accomplishment of English education in korea falls short of expectations for the spent time and energy for English education. What  researchers say commonly is that this situation is the result of the conservative English education system that has been only existed in Korea. Like this, There are some problems that should be changed for students' capacity to write in English. The first one is that English education in korea is concentrated on theoretical matters that make English composition hard. And the second is that creativity that is needed to find proper materials for essay is suppressed by the education in Korea.The third is the education make Korean students have perfectionism inclination that is needless in English writing. However, If my argument that current educational paradigm should be gone through an  innovation is accepted, there would be wonderful synergy effects like opening the opportunities for Korean students to step forward to global society. Therefore, to participate in global society more actively, changes should be started from school and it is the time for it.