Week 11- Self Evalution

1) What score do you think you deserve? Here is the rubric:

2 points - The first draft is thoughtful and a good start to an effective persuasive essay. It demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument.

1 point - The student completes a first draft that demonstrates an understanding of the classical argument

0 points - The first draft is inadequate

I think I would get 2 points with my first draft. My essay is thoroughly thoughtful and a good start to an effective persuasive essay. Although there would be some differences with Sam teachers' requirements, I wrote the first draft with conforming the format that teacher suggested. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

2) What did you do well?

I think I did well in the part of confirmation. In confirmation, I wrote my first draft by using almost materials from researching process. I think I was good at understanding the problem of the situation and my argument. With the argument that English education in school should be changed for Korean students to  bring up the ability for English composition, I deployed it in quite a logical way. First, I refer what kind of our country's English education hinders the students' the capacity for English composition. Next, I  suggested some quotations and researches from gurus. Third, I described the current circumstances that occurs in Korea against the opinions of researchers. In this way, I think I did a quite good job in confirmation.

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arguments are based off of opinions and personal feelings.
3) What could you have done better?

It leaves me much to be desired in the part of "Refutation and_Confirmation". If I searched more about the opposite arguments and I tried to suggest more compelling refutation, I could be better. Also, the Refutation and Concession are relatively shorter than other parts of first draft. So, for the next time, I will make the part more logical and longer. _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

4) Which part of the classical argument did you use the best?

 I think I did well in the part of confirmation. In confirmation, I wrote my first draft by using almost materials from researching process. I think I was good at understanding the problem of the situation and my argument. With the argument that English education in school should be changed for Korean students to  bring up the ability for English composition, I deployed it in quite a logical way. First, I refer what kind of our country's English education hinders the students' the capacity for English composition. Next, I  suggested some quotations and researches from gurus. Third, I described the current circumstances that occurs in Korea against the opinions of researchers. In this way, I think I did a quite good job in confirmation.
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5) Which part of the classical argument did you use the most poorly?

I think my researches are not enough to persuade the high- ranking public officials who are engaging in the Ministry of Education. So, I think i need more sources to strengthen my argument. _____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________

6) What's your strategy to make your second draft better?
_I will make my second draft better based on more compelling and convincing researches. Accepting sam teacher's feedback, I am not going to limit the content only with English composition but going to write about overall limitations  Korean English education system. 
Therefore, I changed my thesis to " Korea will fall behind global society if English education in Korea does not get to change." _______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________