First draft : The narration

My persuasive argument thesis is: English education system in Korea should be changed for students to bring up their ability for English composition.

1. What do people already know about my topic?

Many people in Korea have already felt serious problems in Korean educational system. However various matters in education system have risen continuously , any apparent resolutions or idealistic educational policies  are not arranged so far. In this situation, I think most of people already know it very well and they might agree with my topic that Korean education hampers students' ability to speak and write in English, namely, they can not approach English essentially.

2. What research has already been done about my topic?

.-http://www.naeil.com/news_view/?id_art=114343//http://www.tuntunsquare.com/

    http://www.ihalla.com/read.php3?aid=1408978800473067193
   I mixed 3 sources to explain  and show well the situation Korea is in.
  -http://www.sk.com.br/sk-krash.html
   In this source, I could find some results of experiments that are conducted by Stephen Krashen. Those are enough to attract interests.

3. What are the implications of my argument (What if I'm right? What if I'm right and people ignore me?)

If i'm right, Korean government should go through an innovation and  changes in education system. Especially, the current course of English learning must be changed for the first time. However, if people ignore my argument albeit my argument is right , such a Korean conservative trends in Education must be maintained. Then, it will react really be harmful for the global society. The ability to build up a sentence in English is really important and useful for stepping forward in to a broader world.

My Narration

According to EF, the biggest global educational company, korea held 24th in the English Proficiency Index among the 60 countries where do not use English as the main language. Korean people have so tremendous ardor for English education that they spend approximately 2 billion time for English education from elementary school to college. However, there were not visual development in the English Proficiency Index for 6 years. It is because of the education system that are centered with memorizing vocabulary and grammar rules so they are bad at writing and speaking in English. As we can see the situation that Korean society has countered, I thought we should be able to consider whether English education in korea is operated well or not.

A series of researches shows that changing English education system  is not a easy problem because it has been entrenched for a long time in korea. To look out for the fundamental matter that korean society is struggling, I started researching with general occasions that also involve not only korean but also general kids and I narrowed the extent to foucus on the case of korean students who feel hard to do English composition. my argument is accepted and the trend of English education is changed in Korea, it can make korea have bigger manpower and precipitate the approaching into global society.

Having difficulties on writing is a general burden that people all around the world feel commonly. According to Richards, Regina G. Richards, the head of Richards Educational Therapy Center, some students dislike writing because they have hard time getting started and they feel that the paper never turns out the way they want. Others dislike writing because they have nothing to deliver and talk about, or, due to the lack of material. The other people hate composition because they are suffering from linguistic disorder. Like this, we can know that there are distinctive reasons why students are frustrated on writing. This source shows us the hardship of writing is not the only problem of Korean students, but what important is that a conservative English education system in korea does not provide any opportunities for students to be familiar with English composition.